For Writer's Workshop. My first submitted/completed ( ) piece of poetry... for my low, low standards, it's pretty good.

And no, the title is not some random thing.

1. I rarely write poetry, but I believe that I often punctuate. This might be because I'm influenced by prose.

2. Yup. I said nothing, I originally had it without the comma, but for consistency and looks I added it. at school, because they This was a completely different line before, and when I wrote this it didn't have a comma.
For the two opening stanzas, I'm considering putting a semi-colon there, but the period seems to be working fine.

3. This is a new poem. I am insecure about some punctuation choices, though.

4. The writing should let the reader feel the underlying emotions the narrator has: anger, pain, and maybe remorse and some reminiscence. I wanted a slightly erratic touch, and didn't want it to flow like water down a drain on a street I also wanted to have that personal feel to it.